{"id":981,"date":"2009-02-14T19:31:00","date_gmt":"2009-02-14T19:31:00","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/bestfantasynovel.com\/2009\/02\/14\/crushed\/"},"modified":"2009-02-14T19:31:00","modified_gmt":"2009-02-14T19:31:00","slug":"crushed","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/2009\/02\/14\/crushed\/","title":{"rendered":"Crushed"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>The Secret Agent has been slowly working her\/his way through the entries in the contest, expressing interest in a few, dismissing others as too cliched, confusing or overwritten.<\/p>\n<p>Mine was crushed like an empty beer can at a tailgate party.<\/p>\n<blockquote><p>Not hooked. Sorry. I felt like there was a lot of overwriting in the first two paragraphs. <\/p>\n<p>&#8220;languoruous, bear-sized roots&#8221;<\/p>\n<p>&#8220;Kavio debated himself briefly&#8221;<\/p>\n<p>And then the wrap up that he must kill her becuase she&#8217;s dancing without magic just seemed too out of the blue for me to take seriously. <\/p>\n<p>If he knows about this law, then he would be immediately on edge when seeing a secret dancer, correct? The scene would need to be written completely differently if that is the case.<\/p><\/blockquote>\n<p>I&#8217;m not too worried about the purple prose. The Secret Agent has no way of knowing, but I do, that I probably got a little carried away with this prologue. The other concern &#8212; that he would be immediately on edge seeing a secret dancer, is a bit harder to do anything about. Although, originally, when the prologue was about 300 words instead of 250, there was a &#8220;foreshadowing&#8221; about the law and the dancing. Maybe I should put that back in.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>The Secret Agent has been slowly working her\/his way through the entries in the contest, expressing interest in a few, dismissing others as too cliched, confusing or overwritten. Mine was crushed like an empty beer can at a tailgate party. Not hooked. Sorry. I felt like there was a lot of overwriting in the first [&hellip;]<\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":2,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"open","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"_jetpack_memberships_contains_paid_content":false,"footnotes":""},"categories":[1],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-981","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-uncategorized"],"jetpack_featured_media_url":"","jetpack_sharing_enabled":true,"_links":{"self":[{"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/981","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/2"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=981"}],"version-history":[{"count":0,"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/981\/revisions"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=981"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=981"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"https:\/\/taramayastales.com\/bestfantasynovel\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=981"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}